I understood the shield/wound use of cards from reading the text, so it works.
Converting a rank to a number of cards is not difficult per se.
Every game is a compromise and it looks like you’ve gotten the game to its balance point for you.
That’s a great place to be in 
Hi DeReel! I’ve been debating getting back to that project. I’m pleased that you remember anything about my game 2 years later!
@bengrayawhile, DeReel & Rickard provide really solid feedback! I would recommend using the feedback unless you have a reason not to do so. One of the reasons my Leadtown project stalled is I was recommended to read Law’s Out. Leadtown has many of the same themes, most of the same troupes, and is more succinct so I was struggling to differentiate my game from that and then work got busy. Specifically for my game which includes bidding, that was done there too. Silver City Legends appears to have more in common with Aces & Eights though.
I’m happy to provide feedback too if you like, for what it’s worth.
Thank you!
I have been very lucky to get a lot of good feedback that i m incorporating as much as i can. I’m sorry to hear your project stalled. If you are interested in taking a look at Silver City Legends please feel free!
I Hadn’t heard of Aces & Eights before so ill check it out!
Hello all!
Your feedback has been super helpful and I have been able to streamline and improve much of the document with your advice.
Right now I’m struggling with the injury and recovery section. A lot of the sentences feel clunky and I want to focus on using “you” and “your charcter” as I have elsewhere, but I cant seem to work it out in a way that makes sense.
Any insight would be greatly appreciated!
Ben G
Here is the section I am struggling with: LINK
Cool. I made an ERU (Easy to Read andf Understand) version here:
The motto I applied is “players don’t need to understand rules, it’s you who want players to use rules, so you better make them handy and easy”.
The first writing pass is for explaining, the second for pruning, and the third to convey the tone.
What’s the story with the fish creature?
From what I can tell, this is what I mean with “terminology sickness”. You coin “Scrapes” in order to describe “Wounds” in order to describe “Resolve”.
I also agree with DeReel in how to write a text. First draft is for yourself, the first rewrite is for your players. Be harsh and kill your darlings in order to compress the text into something comprehensible.
Thank you for the very quick and clear response!
I think I can see where i can trim quite a bit of fat in my version. I’m definitely in the pruning phase with much of this game.
The fish creature is just a stand in for now as part of the example. It may eventually be a cactus person or something else.
Hey folks, been a while. I finished Silver City Legends!
You can check it out here: https://skeletonslinger.itch.io/scl
Thanks everyone who took a look in the early days!